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Notes on point of view and rewriting )

I'm still somewhat partial to the original version because I wanted to show that even monsters have motivation beyond "I want to make the hero's life miserable," but I think the final cut fits better into the story. For posterity, here is the original:

Original Azula scene )
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This is the original draft of Chapter 10-2 of Shadow of the Dragon King. My beta [livejournal.com profile] amyraine raised some issues with it, particularly a last bit when she felt Yenzi's reaction came out of nowhere. I decided to rewrite it from Yenzi's point of view, and while the rewrite took months with all the other stuff I had going on at the time, I felt the results were worth it. It was certainly an education in the importance of point of view. The new version posted to FanFiction.net is here. The original, external PoV version is below.

10-2 Original Draft )

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